@fribbledom the important part of the haiku isn't the 5-7-5 at all, in fact a lot of them don't even follow that rule, but rather the cutting word
(i don't know if it's at all propert to put the kireji at the very end, but if so, the op is great - as a matter of fridge logic)
mf said "kireji at the very end"
til it's the break itself not the keyword just before it